Preview of My New Apartment
Feb 11, 2016 18:51
Today was the National Foundation Day.
Therefore, I went to Tokyo, and saw an apartment that I will live in from April.
Although I slightly bothered train noises from railway tracks, I decided the apartment because other conditions were totally good.
After that, I went shopping while doing sightseeing.
I bought items too much before I know it.
I have hardly any money now.
Therefore, I went to Tokyo, and saw an apartment that I will live in from April.
Although I slightly bothered train noises from railway tracks, I decided the apartment because other conditions were totally good.
After that, I went shopping while doing sightseeing.
I bought items too much before I know it.
I have hardly any money now.
アパートの内見
今日は建国記念日であり、祝日です。
そのため、今日は東京に来て、4月から住むアパートの内見に来ました。
線路が近くてちょっと電車の音が気になる物件でしたが、それ以外の条件が良かったので、そこに決めました。
それから観光しながら買い物をしました。
ついつい色々なものを買いすぎてしまいました。
財布が寂しいです。
今日は建国記念日であり、祝日です。
そのため、今日は東京に来て、4月から住むアパートの内見に来ました。
線路が近くてちょっと電車の音が気になる物件でしたが、それ以外の条件が良かったので、そこに決めました。
それから観光しながら買い物をしました。
ついつい色々なものを買いすぎてしまいました。
財布が寂しいです。
No. 1 bunzuyom's correction
- Therefore, I went to Tokyo, and saw an apartment that I will live in from April.
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Therefore, I went to Tokyo, and saw an apartment that I will live in, on April. Therefore, I went to Tokyo, and saw an apartment that I will live in from April to August(just an example).
The preposition "from" indicates a point wherein something starts, therefore using it requires an end point as well with the use "to" in between. Most sentences don't generally require this, but this particular statement does. If you do not want to give an endpoint, use the preposition "on" instead. And here's a link for the correct usage or on, in, at: http://www.talkenglish.com/grammar/prepositions-on-at-in.aspx
- Although I slightly bothered train noises from railway tracks, I decided the apartment because other conditions were totally good.
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Although I was slightly bothered train noises from railway tracks, I decided to choose(approve,accept etc. and other synonyms wherein you show approval) the apartment because the conditions are were totally good.Or:Because some of the conditions are good.
I slightly bothered *noun* suggests that you bothered the train noises, whilst I was* means you were bothered from the clamor of from the railway tracks.
"I decided the apartment" means you have come to a decision on the apartment but doesn't necessarily suggests you approved of the apartment but you have come to conclusion and that is the apartment.
The clause: "Because other conditions were totally good" has nothing grammatically incorrect about it although a bit of re-editing and the adverb "totally" is unnecessary. I used the verb "are" instead of were because it shows that the conditions, at present are still good.
- After that, I went shopping while doing sightseeing.
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After that, I went shopping while doing sightseeing.
The use of the verb "doing" and the addition of another verb is unnecessary.
- I bought items too much before I know it.
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I bought items too much before I know it.I bought too many items before I knew it.
"Much"- indicates a large amount that is used for quantities that are otherwise uncountable by the regular numbers:1,2,3 etc.
Here's a link for the proper usage of much and many:
https://www.ego4u.com/en/cram-up/vocabulary/much-many
"Before I know it" reflects that you've bought too many items before you "at the moment" come to a realization of knowing.
- I have hardly any money now.
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I bought too many items before I knew it and now I have hardly any money.
Adjoining the sentences with conjunctions or commas, colons and semi colons are necessary for a better concise statement.
I hope you enjoy living on your new apartment on April! And yes it is very unfortunate when we buy too many things without realizing how much money we have left. :/
Much love <3, and take care!
Much love <3, and take care!
Toru
Thank you very much for the corrections and the kind explanations!
These are very helpful to me :)
Yes, I think I was stupid.
I will be more careful not to buy too much things, hehe.
Thank you very much for the corrections and the kind explanations!
These are very helpful to me :)
Yes, I think I was stupid.
I will be more careful not to buy too much things, hehe.
No. 2 Yukinekorin's correction
- Preview of My New Apartment
- This sentence is perfect! No correction needed!
- Today was the National Foundation Day.
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Today was the National Foundation Day.
We don't really need to use "the" when referring to a name. As National Foundation Day is a name of a holiday, "the" is not needed.
- Therefore, I went to Tokyo, and saw an apartment that I will live in from April.
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Therefore, I went to Tokyo to check out on an apartment that I will be living in from April onward.
You have not moved in yet, hence "will be" instead of "will".
"Check out" is a better phrase in my opinion, because you are there to see whether the apartment is suitable for you.
- Although I slightly bothered train noises from railway tracks, I decided the apartment because other conditions were totally good.
- Although I was slightly bothered by the train noises from nearby railway tracks, I decided on the apartment because the other conditions of the apartment were okay/fine.
- After that, I went shopping while doing sightseeing.
- After that, I went to do some shopping and sightseeing.
- I bought items too much before I know it.
- Before I realized/knew it, I had bought too many items.Before I knew it, I've overspent.
- I have hardly any money now.
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I don't have much money now.I'm kind of broke now...
The one is red is more of a figure of speech :) We really say that when we have spent too much.
Haha what did you buy? Is National Foundation Day something like Japan's National Day? :)
Toru
Thank you very much always for correcting my post! :)
Hehe, I bought two pairs of shoes and some souvenirs.
> Is National Foundation Day something like Japan's National Day? :)
Yes, National Foundation Day is one of national holidays in Japan.
Thank you very much always for correcting my post! :)
Hehe, I bought two pairs of shoes and some souvenirs.
> Is National Foundation Day something like Japan's National Day? :)
Yes, National Foundation Day is one of national holidays in Japan.
Yukinekorin
It's my pleasure! ^^
Japan is so so much larger than Singapore, so when you go to other places in Japan, you actually buy souvenirs from there huh. Singapore is so small (people call us a little red dot on the world map :P) anywhere we go is somewhat the same lol.
Yes, National Foundation Day is one of national holidays in Japan. --> haha I actually meant if it was Japan's Independence Day ^^
It's my pleasure! ^^
Japan is so so much larger than Singapore, so when you go to other places in Japan, you actually buy souvenirs from there huh. Singapore is so small (people call us a little red dot on the world map :P) anywhere we go is somewhat the same lol.
Yes, National Foundation Day is one of national holidays in Japan. --> haha I actually meant if it was Japan's Independence Day ^^
Toru
Yes, in Japan, if you go over a mountain (about 75 percent of the Japanese land is mountainous regions, haha), you can find a little different cultures and customs.
Although Singapore is small, there are a lot of sightseeing spots, so I can buy many souvenirs :D I want to go to Little India next time when I visit Singapore.
> haha I actually meant if it was Japan's Independence Day ^^
Ah, I misunderstood!
Actually, it's not clear when Japan was founded. I heard that we defined this day based on Japanese Mythology
Yes, in Japan, if you go over a mountain (about 75 percent of the Japanese land is mountainous regions, haha), you can find a little different cultures and customs.
Although Singapore is small, there are a lot of sightseeing spots, so I can buy many souvenirs :D I want to go to Little India next time when I visit Singapore.
> haha I actually meant if it was Japan's Independence Day ^^
Ah, I misunderstood!
Actually, it's not clear when Japan was founded. I heard that we defined this day based on Japanese Mythology
Yukinekorin
Ah, you've come to Singapore before? :D There are indeed several sightseeing spots, and most of them are also historical places of interest! The history behind those places are lesser known, even for Singaporeans (and I think I should repeat,Singapore is so small!) if our schools did not arrange guided tours for us xD
Actually, it's not clear when Japan was founded. I heard that we defined this day based on Japanese Mythology
--> I see! Ah, that is certainly interesting. I have always been interested in Mythology, be it foreign or local. When I have improved my Japanese further, I plan to buy a book on Japanese mythology and try reading it ^^
Ah, you've come to Singapore before? :D There are indeed several sightseeing spots, and most of them are also historical places of interest! The history behind those places are lesser known, even for Singaporeans (and I think I should repeat,Singapore is so small!) if our schools did not arrange guided tours for us xD
Actually, it's not clear when Japan was founded. I heard that we defined this day based on Japanese Mythology
--> I see! Ah, that is certainly interesting. I have always been interested in Mythology, be it foreign or local. When I have improved my Japanese further, I plan to buy a book on Japanese mythology and try reading it ^^
Toru
Yes, I've been to NUS to participate in an academic conference :)
The historical places sounds interesting. I might hire a guide, haha.
> When I have improved my Japanese further, I plan to buy a book on Japanese mythology and try reading it ^^
Go for it, I'm proud of you (^-^)
Yes, I've been to NUS to participate in an academic conference :)
The historical places sounds interesting. I might hire a guide, haha.
> When I have improved my Japanese further, I plan to buy a book on Japanese mythology and try reading it ^^
Go for it, I'm proud of you (^-^)
No. 3 Nikoniko's correction
- Therefore, I went to Tokyo, and saw an apartment that I will live in from April.
- Therefore, I went to Tokyo, and saw an apartment that I will live in starting from April.
- Although I slightly bothered train noises from railway tracks, I decided the apartment because other conditions were totally good.
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Although I was slightly bothered train noises from railway tracks, I decided the apartment was good because I really liked some other things about the apartment. other conditions were totally good.
I agree with the other corrections too, but this is just another way to say things :)
Sometimes shopping is fun :) It's okay to let loose sometimes and then start saving again.
Toru
Thank you very much for your corrections! :D
Yes, I will not spend much money for a while!
Thank you very much for your corrections! :D
Yes, I will not spend much money for a while!